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Wednesday, April 24, 2013
I just acoried to me today that I said I was going to post Chapter 10 on Monday.
Oops.
This is not a fun time to write right now. The list of things to get done before finals just keeps geting longer and longer so it is my sad duty to extend the hiatis to the 13th.
Oops.
This is not a fun time to write right now. The list of things to get done before finals just keeps geting longer and longer so it is my sad duty to extend the hiatis to the 13th.
Me the week of finals
But since I havn't posted something in awhile and won't for another 2 weeks, I've desided to treat my readers (all two of you (-: ) I'm going to post something on here more horafiing then anything you have read so far.
The cat scene. The worst thing I ever wrote.
To back up a little bit. As you know, The Nightlings started as a NaNoWriMo novel from 2010. Having writen the first draft in a month, it was less then good. It sucked. But by far, the worst part was a scene that I wrote that when my own mother read, she threatend to put the book down.
Here it is. Enjoy.
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“Like I said I have demons in are
past.” Monday stood up. “Coffee?”
Monday
made coffee in the small kitchen trying to keep quiet so she wouldn’t wake Ezra
or Michael up. Sorin sat at the table as she gave him his coffee sitting down
with hers. “There are demon in your past that you don’t want to talk about to
remember?”
“Yes
because if I brought them up then I would be talking about them. And since I
don’t want to why bother. ” Sorin toke a sip of his coffee trying not to make a
face. Monday didn’t have to read his face to understand; living with Ezra had
not improved her cooking skills. “You look different in the morning. Why is
that?”
“Because
in the morning I look like hell. I may not look perfect like the girls at
school but it takes a lot to look even descent. This is me without make up to cover
my scars or shadows under my eyes?”
“What
scars?” Monday put her hand out when she regretted. There was still dried blood
on her finger tips where her claws grew in. Sorin grabbed her hand up causing
Monday to scream out. “What did you do to yourself? They look ghastly!”
Monday
didn’t know how to answer. Because of the dried blood she could say that they
were old and if they were from what? She unthinkingly said that they were
recurring so she either looked crazy or psychotic. Monday thought fast on what
to tell him.
“Cat!”
Sorin looked at her skeptically. “Ezra and Michael have a cat …that scratches…its
looked up in there room right now…id show you the cat but I don’t want to wake
them up…you understand.”
“Oh
ok.” Sorin looked relived that Monday wasn’t crazy. “It’s better that its
locked up, I’m allergic. It funny because normally when someone owns a cat I’m
deathly allergic to that person. Weird.”
Monday
toke another sip of her coffee glad that she one dodged a bullet with Sorin. It
was still too early in the relationship and morning to bring out the Nightling
card. She was just thinking about how she really needed to learn how to make decent
coffee when Sorin asked.
“So
why aren’t you sleeping? More demons I supposed.” Before she could come up with
something Ezra walked out of his room in what smelled like an old shirt that
had what Monday thought was dried B positive blood.
“Morning
Pumpkin. Hope you caught something hunting last night because I sure as hell
didn’t.” Ezra said making things worse. Ezra walked into the kitchen only to
see Sorin looking confused while eyeing his bloody shirt. “What going on?”
“What
did you mean by hunting?” Sorin asked pointing at the shirt. Monday hid her
face in her hands trying to come up with a quick lie, before she could Ezra
either made things worse or better. “Is that blood?”
“Hunting
for coupons!” Ezra said as Monday peeked out from between her fingers.
“Michael; my partner, is a coupon fanatic and everything is bought with
coupons. He has us spend all night trying to find the best ones. It’s crazy but
I love him and she basically does what I tell her to right pumpkin?”
Monday
nodded quickly. Sorin still looked confused. “That doesn’t explain the blood-”
“The
cats got into a bad fight last night.” Monday said trying to drink her coffee
calmly. Sorin did a quit ‘Oh’ before excusing himself for the bathroom. Once he
left Ezra sat down in his empty chair.
“Why
the hell is he here and what cat are you talking about?”
“I
had to tell him something. He came over to pick me up for the date I forgot
about and asked about the scars on my hand. I’m not a good liar Ezra; I’m not
used to it. This is why I keep people away.”
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